Writing L.S.

Brooklyn’s Writing Learning Story.

Term 3 2019

“How do we  create a moment in time so our audience feels like they are
there with us?”

As I am walking on the stage, the butterflies flying around in my stomach. I
am really nervous about performing in front of hundreds of people.

Before I knew it our first song starts and I am singing loudly trying to focus
on the song and not my nerves. Then I start to smile and it is so fun, the big
audience is cheering for us so loudly we can’t even hear our song. Finally, our
song is finished, now it is time for our sasa. We are all pumped because we all
like the drumbeat. I am thinking to myself “we can’t mess this up now we have
trained too hard” I can hear the drums starting.

My sweat is pouring down as if it is raining because it is very hot. We are all
doing the actions very fast because our drummer is drumming so fast we are
all thinking “is this the flash drumming?” The sasa is finished, now it is time
for the girls to dance, the music is on, the boys are screaming “cheerhooo!”
Taylor-Von is doing her dance the crowd is cheering the loudest I have ever
heard them cheer.

Reflection

I am good at using a range of types of sentences - complex, compound and
simple. This is engaging for my readers.

I need to work on writing enough to get an entertaining ending to my moment
in time writing.

I need to work on choosing to use words, phrases, simile, etc to describe and
build a picture and the mood of my writing (excitement, fear, pride. . .)